This is promising for a first cut Tillie, but still lots to do. Your documentary is at 5 minutes but is currently lacking variety in shots. the shots you have of fairfield work well, but you probably need to half these. One example of this is from 00.01.12 where you have a slow shot of the walls surrounding the building, this lasts far too long and wold benefit form a re-inactment being cut in based on what your actress is describing. The music throughout also worked brilliantly to mediate it. One example of this is from 00.01.12 where you have a slow shot of the walls surrounding the building, this lasts far too long and wold benefit form a re-inactment being cut in based on what your actress is describing. Check your sound level from 00.03.45 as it suddenly gets very loud. The shots of your actress are great, but maybe try to add more to the story by getting a different perspective through talking heads- a family member or a prison officer. When she speaks about the interrogation room, you could include a bit of found footage to show the room. Please consider what you can do now to improve this further with the time you have- I would recommend revisiting your production schedule to now meet the final cut deadline.
This is promising for a first cut Tillie, but still lots to do. Your documentary is at 5 minutes but is currently lacking variety in shots. the shots you have of fairfield work well, but you probably need to half these.
ReplyDeleteOne example of this is from 00.01.12 where you have a slow shot of the walls surrounding the building, this lasts far too long and wold benefit form a re-inactment being cut in based on what your actress is describing.
The music throughout also worked brilliantly to mediate it.
One example of this is from 00.01.12 where you have a slow shot of the walls surrounding the building, this lasts far too long and wold benefit form a re-inactment being cut in based on what your actress is describing.
Check your sound level from 00.03.45 as it suddenly gets very loud.
The shots of your actress are great, but maybe try to add more to the story by getting a different perspective through talking heads- a family member or a prison officer.
When she speaks about the interrogation room, you could include a bit of found footage to show the room.
Please consider what you can do now to improve this further with the time you have- I would recommend revisiting your production schedule to now meet the final cut deadline.
Keep up the hard work Tille.